my eyes begin to open
I am able to see the glistening moon shine
I am able to hear the animals howl
Noticing my surroundings all humble and quiet
Observing is my gift
For I am an owl
I face many problems throughout my life.
But to me these are obstacles
They are just my preys.
I see them from my left
and I see them from my right
Not making them know im there
Because they are in fact,
my kill of the night.
I can be smart and an advanced animal
capable of so many things.
Yet seem to be never satisfied,
with the knowledge I am given
with the things I see
and with the things I feel
But what can I say
These are the aspects
that make me truly real
A symbol of wisdom
i am said to be
But not knowing anything
and not being the greatest size
are just a few weaknesses from me
I was taught to hide them in my mind
Leaving me to be peaceful quiet and kind
There is that side of me
that makes me want to hide
but then there are the ones I love.
With them I feel the sense of pride
that fill me with happiness and glee
confident comfortable and completely freeI am an owl
For I am the the helper above your tree
Observing many that I feel is in need
Yet trying to be the best version
that I could possibly be
Heyyy poet mastaah Jonas ;)
ReplyDeleteI love your poem. As a reader I liked how you compared the behaviors of an owl to yourself and how your life is similar to the life of an owl. I also liked how your poem rhymed towards the ending stanzas. If you could add more similes or metaphors to your poem it would make it the best poem ever !!!!!
Kaay bye ^--^
EXCELLENT DRAFT. MY ONLY SUGGESTION IS TO ADD MORE CHARACTERISTICS OF AN OWL AND MAKE A CONNECTION TO THEM. YOU DO A GREAT JOB OF EXPLAINING MANY CHARACTERISTICS BUT I WOULD LIKE TO HEAR WHY AN OWL COMPARED TO MANY OTHER ANIMALS THAT COULD REPRESENT WHAT YOU ARE TALKING ABOUT. ms(3+)
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